Some Li'l Foxes in College-Level Writing

Following are a few Research Paper samples excerpted from one of my College English classes this year. Happily, there were no Comma Splice little foxes, some improvement from their first In-Class Essay for sure, but other mistakes seem to be just plain stubborn:

A fox in hand is worth ...

NUMBER: SINGULAR/PLURAL

1. As this studies show, maternal stressor …
2. In other word, stress experienced by the mother …
3. fitness equipments
4. … advancing … the economy of their citizen
5. more employments for the people
6. some regionals economies
7. … are major problem faced by …
   
   
   

PREP

1. During the children spend without their parent they could start to play with electronic toys rather than …
2. There are not only women’s problems in nowadays.
3. … the writer arrived Canada as refugees because their hime country had been Spanish civil war there (124).
   
   

SVA

1. Gulli worries that even if nutritious chocolate bar, which contain multiple nutrients …
2. In addition, when developing countries attracts more tourists …
3. When countries pay attention to tourism, they become to focus on modern civilization and technology.
4. The addition of public buildings … enable their cities to become fun places.
5. Another cause of obesity related to foods especially processed foods are the several kinds of preservatives …
6. As a result, ecotourism effective enhance local culture; help protect the natural environment and culture heritage.
7. Ecotourism improve the economic benefits …

FRAG

1. When countries focus on develop their tourism, impact many aspect of economy.
2. According to the WTTC report that global tourists is over 1 billion in 2012.
3. For example, Ma Yun, one of the successful businesssmen in the IT fled.
4. On an extract from 2009 to 2011 Health Survey by Statistic Canada.
5. … accessible; this resulting in more children adopting a sedentary behaviour.
6. Since obese adults will require more medical care.
7. In conclusion would appear that its not a big issue but it’s freighting.

CS - NONE!

ROS

1. Children are our future we cant let them die from obesity.
2. Vending machines are a temptations to children therefore the government should …
   
   

VERBS

1. should be better scrutinize
2. Lau and Townson are mainly focus on the past.
3. Lau aware to the difficulties of women in the business market …
4. Therefore, the solution should be offer by the government of Canada.
5. In this essay I have compare and contrast between the two articles …
   
   

SPELLING

1. spoon and folk
2. obesity co-exists with the under nuricioused
3. a butter future
4. Even thou people are aware …
5. there hunger to eat
6. more emphasize is put on …
7. winner camp … natural winner trip